Beltline_Park

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Comment by Michael J. Severin on October 6, 2015 at 15:14

Not really flaws, Faisal, just areas you could improve on.  The painting is still good.

Comment by Faisal Tariq on October 6, 2015 at 15:03

Wonderful feedback Michael.  It is amazing when someone else points out the flaws and how it jumps out.  Thank you very much for taking the effort to write back.

Comment by Michael J. Severin on October 6, 2015 at 12:43

Oh, Faisal ..one more thing I noticed.  Under the eaves of the gazebo ..both bottom and top, there would be strong warm reflected light ...try using a raw sienna type color under those eaves.

Comment by Michael J. Severin on October 6, 2015 at 12:40

Hi Faisal.   I like your concept on this piece ...the gazebo shape contrasting with the amorphous shapes of the trees is visual music.  You have kept the shadow shapes very interesting .and happy to see that you did not overdo those dappled lights!!!   Here are a few suggestions:  You have hard lines everywhere ..especially the super hard line in the far distant trees ..diffidently  soften that line!!  ...Okay,  I suggest that you cast a shadow on the left end of the picket fence and the grass ...although you have made the intervals different, it is just to long of a shape with that uniform value and lighting.  anyway, the cast shadow could be from a tree off to the left .unseen!!! ....now you have a more interesting fence.  The color of the foreground grass is cooler then the middle and background grass ....suggest you use the same color for the middle plane and distant plane ..then make that foreground grass a tad warmer ..not much though!!!!  A gazebo in the park ..always a good subject matter!! ..BTW, how about a punch of saturated color somewhere near the focal point ....bright red flowers on that bush perhaps??? ..just a thought.  :)))

Comment by Faisal Tariq on October 5, 2015 at 15:03

Thanks Kevin,… The darks in this picture came out a little darker.  The foreground shadow has a tinge of purple.. Thank you for your comment… :)

Comment by kevin miller on October 5, 2015 at 7:36

Interesting piece with strong contrasting value shapes.  Maybe the foreground shadow is a bit dark or lacking some other color but it is a very nice piece!