Gentlemens Pleasure

Oil, still life

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Comment by Michael J. Severin on January 4, 2015 at 6:13: Hi Lisa. Yes, it looks great! ....you have strengthened some areas of your painting creating nice contrasts. You have related all of your shadow colors and values, and the wine bottle is the focal point ...I noticed that you darkened the value of the cloth as it drops down ..excellent ...I had wanted to mention that on my critique, but did not want to "pile on" too much. Don't worry about the glass, it is fine ....the drawing of the ellipse is off a little ..but no big deal ...if we wanted photo realism, we would take a photo!!! ..right? Very good work Lisa. :))

Comment by Lisa Sherratt on January 3, 2015 at 18:48: I have warmed and strengthened the for ground colour. I think now I will just repaint it and move on,

Comment by Lisa Sherratt on January 3, 2015 at 17:03: I am not very good at photos but is this a tad better? I feel I need to something with glass?

Comment by Lisa Sherratt on January 3, 2015 at 13:07: Thanks and I still have that painting so I am going to do as you suggest. I can see exactly what you mean as soon as I read it.

Will keep you updated with that.

Cheers

Comment by Michael J. Severin on January 3, 2015 at 11:46: Hi Lisa. By edge awareness, I mean how you handle hard vs. soft edges and found, vs. lost edges. Now, for instance: The edge of your tall thin bottle where the light and dark background meet is too hard and intense ..we need to look INSIDE the element ..not the edge. So, what you could do there is to lighten the background ever so slightly as it nears that edge ..now you have less contrast at that juncture. Also, the cast shadow coming in from the left ...if you had moved it over a more, it would cast the at the bottom of the canister (bottle) and the bottle would cast a shadow on the bottom of the wine flask ..thus creating interesting shapes and light dark contrast at the focal point ...Use your shadows to make a composition that moves the eye. Be consistent with your shadows ...you have a WARM shadow from the two large elements, but COOL shadows from the pipe and doily, and then you have a pure neutral shadow on the left ...be consistent with those shadows.

Comment by Lisa Sherratt on January 3, 2015 at 11:12: Thanks so much for feedback. I do struggle constantly with painting everything with the same importance and in my next painting I am going to make a focal point and underpaint everything else. Really just for me to see the impact of a defined focal point or area.., Do you mean edge aware as in defining my edges? or being aware of where I need defined edges and not so defined? Once again thanks.

Comment by Michael J. Severin on January 3, 2015 at 5:27: Great concept Lisa ..well painted! ...You handle each element very well ...but you have a tendency (don't we all), to paint everything with the same amount of importance ...something has to be the star and everything else supports the star ....(you have probably heard that, I am sure) ... so .....I suggest you "play" with your shadows a bit more ..make them part of the comp. Also, be more edge aware.