Lining Up

Oil on canvas board
8 x 10 ins

Focus was on:
• translucency
• white teapot & cloth
• analogous colour line red>orange>yellow>green

Keep working on:
• simple strong notan/design - grape was afterthought to extend colour into red but pulls eye back out. Stronger without it? Remove or neutralise…
• looser treatment with accuracy
• creamier paint texture
• more interesting & varied brushstrokes

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Albums: Workshop 7, My Workshop Entries

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Comment by Svitlana Rubtsova on March 31, 2012 at 2:04: This is great painting! I like the shape, colors and composition. I have small advice for you - paint more thickly in some parts of painting.

Comment by Naruemon Srisawarng on March 25, 2012 at 5:33: Love your drawing & color scheme.

Comment by Dee Berridge on March 24, 2012 at 11:30: Thanks Richard. Here's a slightly better shot. I know I need to work on my photography and could do with any further tips please, anyone...?

Comment by Richard Robinson on March 22, 2012 at 13:29: Nice colour design and everything, but shocking photo! You need to get some stronger ambient light on this when you photograph it Dee. :-( I'm liking what I can see though. Nice job.

Comment by Dee Berridge on March 20, 2012 at 1:29: Stu and Kay, thanks for your very useful suggestions. I'm working on another piece at the moment and have dismantled this setup so I'll come back to it later and take a fresh look at it with your ideas in mind.

Comment by Kay Lenehan on March 19, 2012 at 11:20: Dee Perhaps you could put in another slice of orange between the lemon and the apple, overlapping both of them or behind the lemon and in front of the apple. Cheers Kay

Comment by Stuart J. Gourlay on March 19, 2012 at 4:08: Dee, much better without the grape! If you extend the orange slice a tiny bit toward the lemon and extend the lemon back a little you will get rid of your cloned negative space with minimal painting. What I would do if this were my painting, and I wanted to tweak it, would be to paint out the grape and put some Liquin over the opposing faces of the lemon and orange and bring them together so the orange overlaps the lemon and take a look. If it doesn't work, wipe it off with OMS. It is really a very good painting. An alternative is to play with the orange and lemon in Photoshop and work it out there; I am not good enough with Photoshop to do that because I am too lazy to learn all the tools. Stu

Comment by Dee Berridge on March 19, 2012 at 3:50: Thanks Kay and Stu. Here it is without the grape...pulling the other fruits together is a bit bigger job!

Comment by Stuart J. Gourlay on March 18, 2012 at 20:35: Dee, nice work. Lose the grape, you don't need it and it pulls your eye away from the focal point. Your 3 central fruits are lined up with equal spaces between them (cloned). Painting would be stronger if you pulled them together and put each in front of the next. Everything else has been accomplished. Translucency is fabulous. Stu

Comment by Kay Lenehan on March 18, 2012 at 15:17: Love this - the sahdows are working well. I agree with you and think that the grape brings the eye away. Overlapping the fruit and the teapot gives cohesion to the composition.