After Rain, 031215

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Comment by Laura Xu on April 18, 2015 at 8:42

Michael, I got it. I will improve this one!

Comment by Michael J. Severin on April 18, 2015 at 8:37

The main thing is to make your elongated rectangle of water a more interesting  ..shape.  You have many ways to do that.  BTW, to lead the viewer from front to back, you go dark to light ...we humans like to go toward the light.

Comment by Laura Xu on April 18, 2015 at 7:28

Michael, Thank you soooo much! I see your point here. My intention was using lighter color water to lead viewer from front to back, then to mountain to clouds, but it is not very clear I think. If I modify little bit middle ground water that can make the painting connected together may be?

Comment by Michael J. Severin on April 18, 2015 at 7:04

Hi Laura.  The sky, hills, and foreground as far a color and value are fantastic.  Your sky and hill are well designed shapes ..you see ..shapes ..not sky and hill ...well designed shapes ...you nailed that.  Now, that strip of water in the middle ground ..not a well designed shape ...nether is the foreground land masses.  A vertical element is needed, like you said, to connect the foreground to the background plane.  You could eliminate the straight line of the left land mass by extending the mass out into the water along the left edge? ..but make it an interesting shape.  That would give that land mass a better shape, and by way of negative space, give the water a better shape.  Laura, when you design you painting, think unequal space division, good shapes, and value structure.  Try and design it so your darks and lights are connected ..they do not need to be physically connected, but close.  Don't forget, that the water is usually darker then the sky in value.

Comment by Laura Xu on April 18, 2015 at 5:35

Thank Jon for your thoughtful comment! I kind of understand what you mean. May be it needs some vertical element to balance the painting. Also I do feel the water in the middle is little bit flat. The sky color seems bluer than really painting.

Comment by Jon Main on April 18, 2015 at 4:50

Well done or getting the feel of rain - dunno how!! - must be the color? What I feel is that this one and the previous one feel a bit 'empty' somehow... ? ....

Comment by Laura Xu on April 18, 2015 at 4:09

Thank you so much Jessica, Ruby, Linda for your encouragement!

Comment by Linda McNeill on April 18, 2015 at 3:11

It has a rainy feel to it, Laura. Well done.

Comment by Ruby on April 18, 2015 at 2:44

awesome sky Laura

Comment by Jessica Futerman on April 17, 2015 at 21:07

Really like the sky & the colours on the hills, Laura!  

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