w21 Sea Shack II

oil on canvas paper 16 x 12

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Comment by Robyn (Ro) Lovelock on August 2, 2013 at 12:01: Superb Lori! Ro x

Comment by Lori Ippolito on May 25, 2013 at 15:24: Thanks Stu, Montalvo, Ningning Li & Betsy!! This was a good learning experience..I appreciate your comments & suggestions!! I thought the blue in the boats was too dark for the distance..will def gray them down a bit..I think if I combined my first & second I'd have a pretty good painting!!!

Comment by Betsy Jenkins on May 25, 2013 at 14:05: Your picture has something my picture lacks and needs---more soft edges. This is correct as things get further into the distance. Things closer to the viewer would be a little sharper/harder edges, i.e. the rocks. Things farther away get grayer and dimmer, i.e., the roof of the far building compared to the roof of the front building. I feel the light on the front building which is great! I should still feel light on the far building roof, but softer somehow. Mr. Robinson said that we would find more contrast in the front building than in the far building because as things get farther away, the values get closer together. So maybe restate and deepen your darks/shadows a little in the front building. I like (love!) that color blue on the boats, and it looks pretty against the orange of the building. However, unless you are going to exaggerate all the colors as the "style" of the painting, you might want to gray that down, as Stu suggested. Do NOT get frustrated, as you stated in another post. (Easy for me to say, since I let frustration overtake me more often than I should). :-) I think this is a keeper. Your colors are pleasing and comforting. Its a warm and wonderful day at this pier. Wish I was there. Just refine it a little, and you'll be good to go.

Comment by Ningning Li on May 25, 2013 at 13:38: Lori, I enjoy the light of this painting more than the first one. Your drawing is very good and value and color harmony are nice too. I like the way you put the rocks under the water ,very realistic. About composition, personally I would make the building near me bigger enough to cross the center of the canvas not only horizontally but vertically to atract attention as a center of interest.

Comment by Montalvo on May 25, 2013 at 4:46: I like that you did another one, good practice. Personally Lori, i like the first one that you did.

Comment by Stuart J. Gourlay on May 25, 2013 at 4:38: Well, this is really nice Lori. You have put the transparency back in the water (no more mud!). Your front building walls should be a little darker because they are in shadow. If you brighten the water as it moves out to sea this will move the eye into the picture a little better. Also you need to darken your shadows under the wharf a little. If your foreground rocks are completely underwater, the way you have rendered them is perfect; however, if they are supposed to be breaking the surface (as in the photo reference) pop some darks in just above the waterline and some highlights on the sun exposed parts of the rocks (increase their contrast). Your boats are ok except for some rather prominent ultramarine blue accents; I would gray those a little. Think about movement of the eye into the painting rather than side to side. Very nice work. Stu

Comment by Lori Ippolito on May 25, 2013 at 4:15: I think I missed the submission deadline but would love comments & critiques on this..couldn't get myself to make it square!! My brain kept getting stuck!! lol